The house
I was targeting Number 29 Doughnut street. Stealing from this house was not a big deal. The house was abandoned basically because the owners passed away from a car crash. I am in front of the house the gate is wide open I go in. I see a vase. I throw it in my bag. I go a little deeper in the house I see a wardrobe I open it. JACKPOT!! All the jewels must be kept here. I through it in my bag. I hear a noise of foot steps I look back but it’s too late I’m hit in the head I’ve lost consciousness.
Sharan,
Yikes! The narrator certainly got into a situation in this piece. I like how you make it feel like the reader is right there during the heist.
Keep writing.
Mrs. G., Team 100, Guilderland, NY, USA